Persuasive Essay

Short Constructed Response for Persuasion

Video Games

Short Constructed Response

Thesis Statement:

It is a sentence that tells the reader what the essay is going to be about; it also has to have your position.

Examples of thesis statements:

Although video games can be detrimental if children play them without parental supervision, video games should not be restricted by the government.

Although video games can be harmful if played without adequate adult supervision, there should not be governmental restriction placed on the use or sale of video games.

There is little or no evidence which shows that excessive use of video games is detrimental to children; therefore, no governmental restriction on its use is warranted.

There is little or no evidence that shows excessive use of video games is detrimental to children; it is the parents’ responsibility to control their children’s video use, not the government’s.

Video games can have a detrimental effect on a child who plays an excessive amount without adult supervision; therefore, there should be some governmental restriction placed on the use and sale of video games to minors.

Students’ Examples of Thesis Statement:

Anna:

Video games can be relaxing and entertaining at the end of a long day; however, they can affect the behavior and thoughts of a child or a teen; therefore, it is the parents’ job, not the government’s job, to restrict the use of video games.

Martha:

Video games have a tendency to be fun and entertaining; however, they can be addicting and can cause problems so the parents should be able to restrict their children’s access to the video games.

DaMaya:

Kids who are addicted to video games are not at fault; their parents are for buying the inappropriate video and allowing it to take over their children’s minds; therefore, the government has done its part and cannot be blamed.

Vocabulary:

Banned: to completely outlaw; to be totally against the law.

One side is demanding more restrictions

Pretty good example:

Another side is demanding no more restrictions but placing the responsibility of video use on the parents.

Video games corrupt young minds by exposing younger players to violence; the constant demand of games and new systems and the crucial impact on the behavior warrant the parents’ overseeing the child’s use of the video games.

Andy:

Video games are fine in moderation and restrictions have already been made, so the rest of the responsibility lies in the hands of the parents for each individual situation.